I decided to throw my hat into the ring for the wonderful Fall Writing Frenzy Contest again this year. For those who don’t know, you pick an image and write a story for kids in 200 words or less. Mine is sad, but it’s the one that poured out of my beleaguered 2020 soul.
I hope it speaks to you in some way. Thanks for stopping by, and thanks to the amazing Kaitlyn Sanchez and Lydia Lukidis for sponsoring this contest. And a huge thanks to all the donors!
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Mom’s Last Wish
2020 Fall Writing Frenzy
199 Words
“I want to see the leaves change color one last time,” Mom said in July when we heard her cancer was back—and worse than ever.
I swallowed hard, but couldn’t form words.
Dad walked over and took Mom’s hand. “We’ll make it happen. I promise.”
So we took Mom home, and kept her room filled with flowers, music, art—and as much laughter as we could manage. For me, laughter was the hardest part.
One early morning in October, Dad gently shook me awake. “Let’s give Mom her wish.”
A red convertible glowed against the sunrise.
I gawked, and Mom smiled. Dad said, “I figure we should do this right.”
As the morning fog burned off the highway, Mom looked between us. “It’s beautiful. This will go in our favorite memories album. Whenever we feel sad, we can flip to this day.”
I closed my eyes, memorizing the wind on my face, and the smell of damp air. But what if I can’t remember everything?
At the slightest touch against my arm, I opened my eyes.
A lone leaf—swirled yellow and orange, had dropped from above.
A tangible keepsake of Mom’s last wish.
Now, I’ll never forget.
DeAnna Smith
Oh Melissa, I love this. I am weeping at the beautiful sight painted out here for me to take in with your thoughtful words. Such a lovely portrait of love and happiness. Thank you for sharing your gift for me to enjoy this the first day of October. DeAnna
melissamiles1
I’m so glad you enjoyed it. It truly just poured out of my heart.
karasibilia
This is so beautiful-it made me tear up. Wonderful story!
melissamiles1
Thanks for reading!
katiefischerwrites
It’s achingly sweet and the voice seeps love for family. Wish you the best in the contest.
melissamiles1
Thank you for reading it!
Jennifer Raudenbush
Wow, you really pulled me in with the first sentence. Very poignant piece. Good luck!
melissamiles1
Thanks, Jennifer. I look forward to reading yours as well. Planning to do it today. Hope all is well! I sure do miss HIghlights! 🙂
Colleen Owen Murphy
I love the fact that dad borrowed the red convertible for the occasion. Very moving story.
melissamiles1
My dad would have done the same. We lost him 2 years ago, and my sister shortly before that. I think this story comes from those losses. Thankfully, I still have my mom. Thanks for taking the time to read and comment!
Colleen Owen Murphy
I am so sorry for the loss of both your father and your sister.
melissamiles1
Thanks. It’s tough, but so grateful I had them in my life.
Sarah Meade
This is so beautiful and sad. I love the last image of the story.
melissamiles1
Thanks, Sarah. I’m looking forward to reading your entry as well.
writersideup
Wow. So heartfelt and bittersweet <3
melissamiles1
Thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment.
melissamiles1
I love the way you put that! Thanks for reading. 🙂
Kelly Conroy
This is beautiful.
melissamiles1
Thank you, and thanks for reading!
Laken Slate
Oh my heart! A delicate tribute to tragedy.
melissamiles1
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment! 🙂
Karen
Oh, this is so touching! Very nice!
melissamiles1
Thank you!
Colleen Owen Murphy
<3
jrichter
The above comment was from me, Jennifer Richter (sorry, I clicked too soon). And thank you for your kind words about my story.
melissamiles1
Thanks for taking the time to comment, Jennifer!
Jamie Bills
What a powerful story in so few words. I was holding back my emotions. We used to drive up in the mountains with my grandparents every fall to look at the leaves, then came the year we lost both of them to cancer. You brought back those feelings. Beautiful. Best wishes with the contest.
melissamiles1
Thanks Jamie. My grandparents lived in the mountains too, and I always miss them this time of year especially. Good luck to you as well.
Dana Marie Miroballi
This is sad and beautiful.
melissamiles1
Thank you for reading.
melissamiles1
Thanks for taking the time to read.
Meghan Wallace
This is beautiful <3 Thank you for sharing your work
melissamiles1
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment!
melissamiles1
Thank you so much for your kind words. I really appreciate it.
farmfolkfamily
Oh, wow, this really tugs at the heart, Melissa. You did a lovely job creating emotion and scene in a small number of words. Good luck with your entry!
melissamiles1
Thanks so much, and you too!
Melissa Coffey
Beautifully written!
melissamiles1
Thanks, Melissa!
Janie Reinart
Melissa, Wow! So much emotion packed into so few words. The ending was perfect!❤️
melissamiles1
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment.
Kaitlyn Leann Sanchez
Very sweet, thanks for sharing with us for the fall writing frenzy
melissamiles1
Thanks for the great contest!
Kaitlyn Leann Sanchez
Very sweet, thanks for sharing with us for the fall writing frenzy